Guided Writing
如何写劝说性建议信
如何算是一篇好文章？
－覆盖了所有的要点
－应用了较多的语法结构和词汇

－有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使全文结构紧凑，行文连贯，条理清楚。
要点全
词汇,句型 （高级）和语法多样化（较复杂）语言地道
连接词
假如你是李华， 请根据下表内容给中国野生动物保护协会CWCA（China Wildlife Conservation Association）的会长写一封建议信。
第一步：审题
养成重视审题的习惯。虽然基础写作题是半封闭性的，但审题仍然十分重要。现以样题为例，谈谈如何审题：
第一人称
一封信
建议采取措施保护羚羊
说理逻辑性
一般现在时
Dear,
Yours sincerely,
Sincerely yours,
Sincerely,
Yours truly,
Yours faithfully
Dear,
Yours,
Love,
…
Dear Sir/ President,
I am Li Hua, a student from Class 1,Senior 1.
I am writing to draw your attention to the
matter that…

I would highly/much appreciate it if you could take
my suggestions into consideration/ account.
Looking forward to your reply./
Best wishes.

Yours sincerely,
Li Hua
假如你是李华， 请根据下表内容给中国野生动物保护协会CWCA（China Wildlife Conservation Association）的会长写一封建议信。
Dear Sir/ President,
I am Li Hua, a student from Class 1,Senior 1.
I am writing to draw your attention to the
matter that…




I would highly/much appreciate it if you could take
my suggestions into consideration/ account.
Looking forward to your reply./
Best wishes.

Yours sincerely,
Li Hua
Para.1 raise the issue: 提出问题
Para.2 analyze the issue: 分析问题
Para.3 solve the issue: 解决问题
1990年藏羚羊的数量大约为100万只，现在只剩下不到10万只，数量急剧减少
Para.1 raise the issue: 提出问题
There were about 1 million antelopes in 1990.
The number of antelopes in 1990 was about 1 million.
Now there are less than 100,000.
At present only about 100.000 are left/remained.
The number of them has decreased rapidly.
At present
left.
dramatically
急剧地
简单句写作
词汇润饰
1990年藏羚羊的数量大约为100万只，现在只剩下不到10万只，数量急剧减少
Para.1 raise the issue: 提出问题
There were about 1 million antelopes in 1990.
The number of antelopes in 1990 was about 1 million.
Now there are less than 100,000.
At present only about 100.000 are left/remained.
The number of them
has decreased rapidly.
At present
left.
dramatically， 急剧地
复杂句合成
from 1,000,000 in 1990 to 100,000 at present.
Tibetan antelopes
Para.2 analyze the issue: 分析问题
1为了获取藏羚羊的皮毛，牟取暴利，捕杀藏羚羊仍然时有发生。
2 栖息地的破坏；食物缺乏。
3.法律不够严厉，公众缺乏保护意识。…
1.To make great profits, the hunters kill
Tibetan antelopes without mercy.
2. Their habitats are destroyed .
3. They are lack/short of food=they lack food.
4. The law is not severe enough.
5. The public still lack the awareness of wildlife protection.
Para.2 analyze the issue: 分析问题
① To make great profits, the hunters kill Tibetan antelopes without mercy. ②Their habitats are destroyed . ③They lack food. ④The law is not severe enough. ⑤The public still lack the awareness of wildlife protection.
要点多，简介概况，不深入，不透彻。
要点之间缺乏顺序、程度衔接词，不流畅。
句式单调，简单，没有复杂句润饰。
复杂句，高级词汇 是点睛。
Para.2 analyze the issue: 分析问题
1.To make great profits, the hunters kill
Tibetan antelopes without mercy.
2. Their habitats are destroyed .
3. They are lack/short of food=they lack food.
To make great profits, the hunters kill/ murder
Tibetan antelopes for their fur without mercy.
=,definitely resulting in/leading to their lack of food.
Their habitats are being destroyed illegally, which
definitely results in/leads to their food shortage.
Para.2 analyze the issue: 分析问题
4. The law is not severe enough.
5. The public still lack the awareness of wildlife protection.
The related laws are not severe enough so that
over hunting can’t be banned completely.
Meanwhile, the lack of awareness on wildlife
protectionalso contributes a lot to this
endangered species.
Para.2 analyze the issue: 分析问题
Tibetan antelopes are being murdered
for their fur without mercy by the hunters to
satisfy their selfless desire of making great profits.
Their habitats are being destroyed
illegally, which definitely results in/leads to their
food shortage. The related laws
are not severe enough so that
over hunting can’t be banned completely. Meanwhile,
the lack of awareness on wildlife protection
also contributes a lot to the endangered species.
Above all,
To make matters worse, their
Besides , the
thoroughly.
① To make great profits, the hunters kill Tibetan antelopes without mercy. ②Their habitats are destroyed . ③They lack food. ④The law is not severe enough. ⑤The public still lack the awareness of wildlife protection.
要点多，简介概况，不深入，不透彻。
要点之间缺乏顺序、程度衔接词，不流畅。
句式单调，简单，没有复杂句润饰。
复杂句，高级词汇 是点睛。
1加大对藏羚羊的保护的宣传力度，提高人们对野生动植物的保护意识。
2 增加藏羚羊的保护的资金，建立保护区等。
3 政府制定相关法律，相关政策,严惩非法捕杀。
We’d better make the importance of wildlife protection known to all and raise the public’s awareness of it.
we should set up more nature reserves.
The government should make laws to punish the illegal hunters.
Para.3 solve the issue: 解决问题
1加大对藏羚羊的保护的宣传力度，提高人们对野生动植物的保护意识。
We’d better make the importance of wildlife protection known to all and raise the public’s awareness of it.

We should advocate提倡，主张 /publicize宣传/ stress/ emphasize the importance of wildlife protection and raise the public’s awareness of it.

It’s high time to pay much attention to /attach great importance/ significance to the wildlife protection and arouse the public’s concern over it.
2 增加藏羚羊的保护的资金，建立保护区等。
We should set up more nature reserves.

It’s of great significance to set up more nature reserves to make sure the Tibetan antelopes have enough living space .

It’s widely advised/ suggested/ advocated that
more money (should) be spent in order to set up nature reserves.
Para.3 solve the issue: 解决问题
3 政府制定相关法律，相关政策,严惩非法捕杀。
The government should make laws to punish the illegal hunters.
Para.3 solve the issue: 解决问题
The government is expected/ supposed to make
severe laws to punish those who threaten the
survival of Tibetan antelopes.
/to protect the …from dying out/disappearance/
disappearing/ extinction.
It’s of great importance / significance to raise the
public’s awareness of wildlife protection.=
to arouse the public’s concern over wildlife
protection.=
develop the public’s sense of wildlife protection.
Para.3 solve the issue: 解决问题
It’s high time to pay much attention to the wildlife
protection and arouse the public’s concern over it. Make sure the Tibetan antelopes have enough living space. It’s of great significance to set up more nature reserves. The government is expected/ supposed to make severe laws to punish those who threaten the survival of Tibetan antelopes.
Therefore , it’s
In addition,
Dear Sir/ President,
I am Li Hua, a student from Class 1,Senior 1. I am writing to draw your attention to the matter that the number of Tibetan antelopes has decreased dramatically, from…to…at present.

Above all, Tibetan antelopes are being murdered for their fur without mercy by the hunters to satisfy their selfless desire of making great profits. To make matters worse, their habitats are being destroyed illegally, which definitely results in/leads to their food shortage. Besides , the related laws are not severe enough so that the illegal hunting can’t be banned thoroughly. Meanwhile, the lack of awareness on wildlife protection also contributes a lot to this endangered species.


It’s high time to pay much attention to the wildlife protection and arouse the public’s concern over it. Make sure the Tibetan antelopes have enough living space. Therefore, it’s of great significance to set up more nature reserves. In addition, the government is expected/ supposed to make severe laws to punish those who threaten the survival of Tibetan antelopes.
I would highly appreciate it if you could take my suggestions into consideration.
Yours sincerely,
Li Hua
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There are three major factors/ reasons accounting for it.
Immediate measures/actions must be taken to improve/better the present situation.
Dear Sir/ President,
I am Li Hua, a student from Class 1,Senior 1. I am writing to draw your attention to the matter that the number of Tibetan antelopes has decreased dramatically, from…to…at present.

Above all, Tibetan antelopes are being murdered for their fur without mercy by the hunters to satisfy their selfless desire of making great profits. To make matters worse, their habitats are being destroyed illegally, which definitely results in/leads to their food shortage. Besides , the related laws are not severe enough so that the illegal hunting can’t be banned thoroughly.
It’s high time to pay much attention to the wildlife protection and arouse the public’s concern over it. Make sure the Tibetan antelopes have enough living space. In addition, the government is expected/ supposed to make severe laws to punish those who threaten the survival of Tibetan antelopes.
I would highly appreciate it if you could take my suggestions into consideration.
Yours sincerely,
Li Hua
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There are three major factors/ reasons accounting for it.
Let’s draw a conclusion.
Step1 make up basic sentences.
Step 2 improve/better/polish your sentences.
advanced words/ phrases
impressive sentence patterns.
Step 3 make each paragraph
smooth and logical
Step 4 make the passage
organized and coherent